Very well written and painted very vivid images of the scenery!
However, are a few spots that remind me that this was indeed written by a man and even the narrator himself doesn’t relate to the main character.
First, someone part of sorority wouldn’t address themselves as a“member”. Small, but enough to raise a question mark and take someone out of the story.
Also “sweat proof makeup” not necessarily a term women would use.
Lastly, the no pantries knowing that she was about to go on a long walk. Again one of those male fantasies that just doesn’t appeal to women. Mostly because hygiene.
Again very well written, however when writing from a woman’s point of view it wouldn’t hurt to get the perspective of a woman.
Very well written and painted very vivid images of the scenery!
However, are a few spots that remind me that this was indeed written by a man and even the narrator himself doesn’t relate to the main character.
First, someone part of sorority wouldn’t address themselves as a“member”. Small, but enough to raise a question mark and take someone out of the story.
Also “sweat proof makeup” not necessarily a term women would use.
Lastly, the no pantries knowing that she was about to go on a long walk. Again one of those male fantasies that just doesn’t appeal to women. Mostly because hygiene.
Again very well written, however when writing from a woman’s point of view it wouldn’t hurt to get the perspective of a woman.